Post by gymus on Mar 3, 2012 16:13:04 GMT -5
Hi. Here are six loglines for my movie Amwolf. My materials are on Ink Tip, but in 10 months I have had only two looks at my synopsis or treatment. That suggests my logline(s) isn't capturing attention.
Please tell me which one is best, or offer a new logline. Are they too long? Thanks.
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Once a happy gray wolf with a wife and three pups, Amwolf morphed into a human after drinking polluting toxins from a stream. Now his quest is to reverse that change and return to his family with the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist, Sara, but not before freeing his pups from the zoo.
After drinking toxins and morphing into a human, an adult gray wolf strives to reverse that change and return to his family with the help of a human biologist, but not before freeing his pups from the zoo.
After drinking toxins, Amwolf morphs from a wolf into a human. With the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist Sara, he tries to reverse that change and return to his family, but only after freeing his pups from the zoo.
A happy gray wolf lives with his wife and three pups, until he drinks some toxins and morphs into a human. Now he must reverse that change and free his pups from the zoo with the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist Sara.
Amwolf is a happy gray wolf with a wife and three pups, but he morphs into a human after drinking toxins from a polluted stream. Now his quest is to be a wolf again and return to his family with the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist, Sara. But not before freeing his pups from the zoo.
Amwolf is a happy wolf living with his wife and three pups, until he drinks toxins and morphs into a human. After traveling to the city, Amwolf works with his new friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist Sara to free his pups from the zoo before he takes the antidote that will make him a wolf again.
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Please tell me which one is best, or offer a new logline. Are they too long? Thanks.
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Once a happy gray wolf with a wife and three pups, Amwolf morphed into a human after drinking polluting toxins from a stream. Now his quest is to reverse that change and return to his family with the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist, Sara, but not before freeing his pups from the zoo.
After drinking toxins and morphing into a human, an adult gray wolf strives to reverse that change and return to his family with the help of a human biologist, but not before freeing his pups from the zoo.
After drinking toxins, Amwolf morphs from a wolf into a human. With the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist Sara, he tries to reverse that change and return to his family, but only after freeing his pups from the zoo.
A happy gray wolf lives with his wife and three pups, until he drinks some toxins and morphs into a human. Now he must reverse that change and free his pups from the zoo with the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist Sara.
Amwolf is a happy gray wolf with a wife and three pups, but he morphs into a human after drinking toxins from a polluted stream. Now his quest is to be a wolf again and return to his family with the help of his friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist, Sara. But not before freeing his pups from the zoo.
Amwolf is a happy wolf living with his wife and three pups, until he drinks toxins and morphs into a human. After traveling to the city, Amwolf works with his new friends Mr. Treaver, Mr. Shraccoon, and a human biologist Sara to free his pups from the zoo before he takes the antidote that will make him a wolf again.
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