Need help with my Logline

[slavi111]

Hi, guys. I really need your help. I’m trying to choose one of the following log lines for my query. Please read them and tell me what you think. Which you like best? ANY criticism is welcome. Just drop me some comment about anything you like (typos, grammar, the idea).


1 A movie director tries to stop a sinister serial killer, a character from his last movie that somehow became real.

2 A move director has to face a sinister serial killer when his last movie suddenly turns into reality.

3 A movie director wakes up in his own movie as the main character where he has to face a sinister serial killer.

4 A movie director gets back in time where he has to stop a sinister serial killer on whom he had just shot his last movie.

5 A movie director happens to be in the middle of the action in his own movie where he has to face a sinister serial killer.

[screenwriter]

Just add "A movie director" in the beginning. We don't need to read repeats. The same with the synopsis to.

[slavi111]

Thanks for the note. Can you tell me which logline you like best.

[screenwriter]

I like the first one better than the rest.

[scripts]

I like the third one best but that describes a different movie than the first -- which is it, does the guy wake up in his own movie or does a character from the movie come into the director's real-life world. Those are two very different things but of the two I prefer the director waking up in his own movie.